100-Word, Friday Fictioneer Time

4 05 2012

I got a chance this week to write with the Friday Fictioneers.  If you want to have a little fun, join in…Madison Woods puts out a photo prompt on a Wednesday and on Fridays everyone shares their 100-word fiction pieces.  Below is the photo prompt for this week, followed by my writing.  Have a great weekend.

I walked into the old dining room, the guys were gutting the whole house.  They were down to the floral wallpaper.

“Stop, wait, please, give me a moment.”  I pleaded, against no opposition.

In that moment the room was transformed.  I sat at the claw-footed table with the worn, cream, plastic tablecloth with blue and red florets. Little Joe was in his high chair, Claire next to me, and Gran and Gramps were in their own world, waltzing to Les Paul and Mary Ford’s, Vaya Con Dios playing on the old console record player.  We loved to watch them dance.  Saturday nights were wonderful.

I turned before they saw my eyes, “Go ahead, tear down the wall.”

 

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34 responses

4 05 2012
JKBradley

A taste of nostalgia.

Here’s mine: http://thebradleychronicles.wordpress.com/

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

A nostalgia never known…thanks for stopping by

4 05 2012
Gary

Nostalgic and sad, but those special memories will remain. Nicely done.

Mine’s nearly 200 words this week:
http://garybaileywriting.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/175/

4 05 2012
readinpleasure

Sentimental road down memory lane. Nicely written. Mine is here: http://readinpleasure.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/fridayfictioneers-lost-without-you/

4 05 2012
Sandra

A nice nostalgic piece. I could almost see that tablecloth. Good one.

http://castelsarrasin.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/dysfunctional-friday-fictioneers-may-2012/

4 05 2012
Jonathan M. Wright

At least they have their memories. I miss my grandmother and she unfortunately didn’t leave a house behind for me to go back to. Anyway, great story and wonderful memories. The detail was perfect.

Here’s mine: http://t.co/nH0gFGpK

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thanks Jonathan…thanks for the input regarding details…always helpful to have

4 05 2012
Lora Mitchell

Beautiful memory…yet bittersweet. Today there’s film, videos/CD’s to capture memories…older folks have nothing but memories and a few, faded photos. Nice work. Here’s mine:
http://www.triplemoonstar.blogspot.com

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thanks Lora…you are right..li think there are fewer family memories for many because family is a different picture for many these days..lthanks for stopping by

4 05 2012
Amanda Gray

Some things stay with you. Great memory! Here’s mine http://createrealitylivelife.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/friday-flash-fiction/

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Not my memory…perhaps a wannabe memory..thanks for stopping by

4 05 2012
teschoenborn

You key in on how small things can trigger memories nicely in this piece. Well done.

Here’s mine:http://teschoenborn.com/2012/05/03/friday-fictioneers-the-gig/

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Always a learning experience to balance the small details with the bigger picture…thanks for your input…always appreciate your comments.

4 05 2012
pinionpost

Excellent details, from the table cloth to the music. They created a vivid, real scene.

–Brian (Mine is here: http://pinionpost.com/2012/05/04/renovations/)

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

So appreciate your comments and input…thanks for stopping by

4 05 2012
Susan Wenzel (@SusanWenzel)

Awww…this was great. You brought a tear to my eye. Days gone by are gone…but they are always with us. And, it was very well written. Thank you for sharing!

~Susan (http://www.susanwenzel.com/)

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Appreciate your input…thanks…it all is a growing experience, and the feedback is helpful.

4 05 2012
V. L. Gregory-Pohlenz

Nicely done Memoir-type piece. I didn’t find it sad–just a sweet memory.

Mine: http://www.vlgregory-circa1800.vpweb.com/blog.html

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

I found it to be a sweet memory, as well…not my memory, but a delightful one….thanks for stopping by

4 05 2012
dmmacilroy

Dear Kris,

A nostalgic moment perfectly captured. i loved the hidden tears and the way you stopped time, reversed it and then started it up again, all in the space of 100 words. Very well done.

Aloha,

Doug

P.S> Thanks for your comments on my work this morning. The link is for others seeking shelter from the storm. D.

http://ironwoodwind.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/the-nerve/

4 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thanks Doug for your comments…I value your input…always appreciated…Kris

4 05 2012
Wakefield Mahon

Hi Kris,
I really enjoyed the emotion of this moment captured in your words. Very strong imagery. Well done!

9 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thank you…sorry I did not reply sooner, somehow your comment was contained in my spam file…so glad I checked…

5 05 2012
oldentimes

a poignant memory! I loved it, there was life and love in that old house!
mine is here: http://oldentimes.wordpress.com/2012/05/04/old-wallpaper-friday-fictioneers/

5 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Yes, we need to keep making poignant memories…thanks for stopping by.

5 05 2012
Mike

A great piece.
Very descriptive & nostalgic – I had a clear picture in my head of those happy Saturday nights.

5 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thanks for your comments…it was a creation, not a memory…but it would be a good memory…thanks

5 05 2012
janpoulton

This was bitter sweet. A beautiful story which brought back some lovely memories for me. My parents used to dance in our kitchen to their favourite music. Always on a Sunday night . Thanks for bringing that back for me. Loved it. Glad you liked mine 🙂

5 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

So this was a memoir story for you…cool

5 05 2012
A Walk In My Heart

Hi Kris! I saw your question at Rick’s blog regarding the blog hosting the full moon haiku. I believe it’s Haiku Bandit Society and this is the address –> http://haikubanditsociety.blogspot.com/

I’ve taken the liberty to answer you seeing that Rick has not replied as he must be busy. The full moon is on Saturday (this evening on your side) so I hope you will be on time to catch it!

Asni.

6 05 2012
Rick Daddario

aloha Kris – i like the gentle blur of time and memory in this. i think you connect to many memories for many people. way fun.

i also wanted to leave part of a reply i made to your comment/request regarding the Moon Viewing Party (just so you’d maybe have time to send something of yours in to the party):

[aloha Kris – way cool that you have some of your work to share at the Moon Viewing party. it’s on the Haiku Bandit Society Blog:

http://haikubanditsociety.blogspot.com/

…he often waits a day or two after the full moon before calling it to an end so i suspect you still have time. it’s a great moon tonight (Saturday night) – the “supermoon” visually brighter and bigger in the sky by a considerable amount this month. ]

i may have to try one of these prompts you play with. they look like a lot of fun. aloha.

9 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Thanks Asni…how kind of you…I did send in the haiga and was included…so nice of you to “intercede”…have a great day

9 05 2012
Brandon Scott

Memories like that have a way of being bittersweet, don’t they? Sometimes the best memories come back with the worst circumstances. I enjoyed your story.

9 05 2012
Kris Kennedy

Hi Brandon…thanks for commenting…yes it was funny, I never had an experience like this, but I do imagine one such as this…have a great day

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